Sunday, April 29, 2012

The Lovers and the Nurse

I can’t lift my arms, my legs;
can’t raise my eyes to see you;
can’t summon my voice to greet you.
My body is betraying me,
but you must know
I love you.

My heart breaks to see you
like this: so weak, so broken.
But it’s me who is weak;
it’s me who won’t set you free.
I need you too much.
I always will.

I do my duty with pride,
though my back aches and
my feet protest at each step.
You need me; he needs me.
This is what gives me the strength to
keep going.


Libby Rodriguez said...

I like this. You've packed a lot into a few words. Nice that you added the nurse's perspective too.

Tara R. said...

A very poignant piece. You conveyed so much emotion is so few words.

Anonymous said...

Depressing situation. I'm glad the nurse showed compassion rather than being overly focused on her own pain.

Anonymous said...

Thanks for linking up to Trifecta this weekend. I love this piece. Your repetition of the word "need" helped seal the three different perspectives into one very solid piece of writing. Great job. Hope you'll come back again soon.

Jester Queen said...

I think it's cool that the spouse feels ashamed of needing the victim so much

Jennifer Worrell said...

Very strong writing! I enjoyed it!

Anonymous said...

I really like the way you repeated words "can't," "need," etc. The repetition helped to ground each individual perspective, while tying them together at the same time. Nicely done.

karen said...

What a solid piece of beauty. Amazing the ways people think about using the prompts, and the characters that arise. This is so poignant.